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Thanks! So Shayan is your real name?
I have read some parts of your stories. It seems that you are talented in story telling, but I have found sort of minor confusion in tenses. For example,
'The bus is not crowded, a few people scattered. Some of them were talking. I found a seat in the back, sat down. I looked at the running through building in the downtown streets in the dark. I sighed, another year...Along with the motion of the bus, I rested in thoughts.'
Confusion of present tense and past tense. I am sorry for my frankness.
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还有
心底涌起的
用玫瑰色
串起的坚贞花环
欣赏。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。 |
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