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xhu · 发表于 2012-7-26 15:20

Post by dummy250;3122739
Thanks! So Shayan is your real name?

I have read some parts of your stories. It seems that you are talented in story telling, but I have found sort of minor confusion in tenses. For example,

'The bus is not crowded, a few people scattered. Some of them were talking. I found a seat in the back, sat down. I looked at the running through building in the downtown streets in the dark. I sighed, another year...Along with the motion of the bus, I rested in thoughts.'

Confusion of present tense and past tense. I am sorry for my frankness.

yes, you are right. I should have used "was". and Sha Yan is my pen name, not my real name.

xhu · 发表于 2012-7-30 01:57

上首开心点的，太伤感了不太好。

Glimpse from the Far East

SHA YAN

Glimpse from the Far East
While not mend in such an ease
Spirit that will swash
Yes, swash is not a “wash”

Dragon’s glimpse
Guilty in a descent night with moon shades
For today’s work, and responsibility
Under the sun, the special girl and her blossom dress

Glimpse to the West
Yes, don’t forget the West
The East and the West
It is the link that generates the flash

The West is for full of glory and decency
And the East is for the sweat
When you read your fine poetry
Look at your fine bowl of rice and fine wine

Tea will blossom
And tea is not guilty
The tea is spirit, and poetry
Poetry will end with such moon shades

xhu · 发表于 2012-7-30 15:46

中国人如果连对诗都没兴趣，那就绝无前途。。。。。。。。。。。

xhu · 发表于 2012-8-1 16:49

哥哥我就这样的人，你要洋我比你还洋，要是土哥也比你土。。。。。。。。。。呵呵。。。。。。。。。。

:cool::cool:

玉瞻阁 · 发表于 2015-7-30 18:04

发个旧作。

Life

Sha Yan

Life is soul.